V.L. Gregory (Pohlenz) - Contact made at:westerndreams@www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com
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#FridayFictioneer -- Ya a' ta yehtsih

   Unbridled, the stream bubbled in its race against Winter. Spadefoot toads snuggled beneath the topsoil, sleeping to the lullaby of waters tumbling over the rocks. Ya a' ta yehtsih's thoughts drifted. She last waded this stream as yawi' tsinoha' (little girl) of fourteen summers; soon to wed.
   Flutes played for her wedding--jubilant, like the fast-flowing currents. They played mournful melodies as her feet trod the Trail of Tears--far from her beloved stream. Later, the spirits of her baby and husband rode upon the wind with their music.
   Eighty winters; the melody bore her beyond the stream to her ancestors. She had lived the rhythm of ordinary days filled with extraordinary deeds.

30 Comments to #FridayFictioneer -- Ya a' ta yehtsih:

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Caerlynn on Friday, February 17, 2012 10:09 AM
A "stream" of memories, well described. Nice!
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V. L. Gregory on Friday, February 17, 2012 11:55 PM
Thank you, Caerlynn, for your comments. I'm making my way down the list of FridayFictioneer contributers--I'm eager to read yours.


Parul on Friday, February 17, 2012 10:26 AM
This is beautifully rendered... Loved this part - " Eighty winters; the melody bore her beyond the stream to her ancestors. She had lived the rhythm of ordinary days filled with extraordinary deeds." Here's mine - http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/moments-gone-and-past/
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V. L. Gregory on Friday, February 17, 2012 11:58 PM
Thank you for the kind words, Parul. I've been in Branson for the OWL's pre-dinner and open mic session so I'm just now getting to the list of FridayFictioneers postings--I'm looking forward to reading yours.


Ron Pruitt on Friday, February 17, 2012 12:30 PM
I really loved that you included what I'm guessing is Cherokee in your piece and I'm intriqued to know where you learned it. I lived for 8 years in Tahlequah, OK, capital of the Cherokee Nation and graduated from the university there. I'm part Cherokee, but don't speak the language. You writing was imbued with nostalgia and a sense of history. Loved it! Here's mine: bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/
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V. L. Gregory on Saturday, February 18, 2012 12:08 AM
Ron Pruitt--Thank you for your "visit." I was inspired to write this piece for part of my story about Sallie Bluejacket. Her ancestry was Shawnee--her great, (etc.) grandfather was Charles Bluejacket, the last of the prominent Shawnee Chiefs. I've visited the Bluejacket cemetery about 15 miles west of Vinita, OK. Chief Charles Bluejacket, Sallie and her husband, Jonathan Gore, and many other of their descendants are buried there. I write YA historical fiction, specializing in the 1800's. I'm eager to see more of your contributions and learn about your background--you sound fascinating. :-)


Gary on Friday, February 17, 2012 12:39 PM
A nice piece filled with nostalgia and a hint of sadness.
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V. L. Gregory on Saturday, February 18, 2012 12:11 AM
Gary, thank you for your comment--I'm a "tad" late, but I'm working my way through the list. Eager to read yours. (I love this 100-word exercise--it's amazing the different tacks each writer takes!)


Siobhan Muir on Friday, February 17, 2012 1:27 PM
Haunting and beautiful, VL. A wonderfully rendered life in so few lines. Thanks for sharing. :)
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V. L. Gregory on Saturday, February 18, 2012 12:13 AM
Thanks Siobhan for "dropping in" for a visit. I appreciate your comments. Looking forward to finding your name in the list and reading your story. :-)


Douglas MacIlroy on Saturday, February 18, 2012 4:00 AM
Dear v.L., A wonderful story that removes us unaware to another world well rendered right up to the last sentence. A life in 100 words. Very nicely done. Aloha, Doug http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/02/17/ask-ulysses/
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V.L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 10:39 PM
Thanks, Doug--OWL conference this weekend so I'm running late with acknowledgments. Appreciate your comments.


Lora Mitchell on Saturday, February 18, 2012 4:06 AM
Beautiful. Lovely images. Wondered about the language. which tribe? Have a feeling you may find my ending interesting. Here's mine: www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
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V.L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 10:58 PM
Lora, I'm running late with acknowledgments as I attended OWL conference this weekend. Thanks for visiting and commenting, it was appreciated. Triplemoonstar sounds like an Indian name--am heading over to your site to read your submission. Ya a' ta yehtsih is Wandat language--Wyandotte Nation.


CC on Saturday, February 18, 2012 8:43 AM
Really liked this piece! You said so much in so few words. Would be interested in reading more
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 10:59 PM
CC, thanks for "dropping in" and commenting--it is appreciated.


Charles Williams on Saturday, February 18, 2012 8:53 AM
this piece unearths buried emotions and says in a few words the story of a live.
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 11:02 PM
Charles, Thanks for visiting and commenting. It is appreciated. Sorry I'm running late with acknowledgments--I've been at the OWL conference this weekend.


susielindau on Saturday, February 18, 2012 5:02 PM
Wow! An entire lifetime passed during the course of those 100 words. I really liked the Native American feel to it as if it were part of their oral history. Well done!!
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 11:04 PM
Susie, Thanks sooooo much for your comments--they were appreciated.


Beth Carter on Saturday, February 18, 2012 10:49 PM
Great job, as always, Ginny. Like everyone else, I loved the Native American touches and admire your research in this important era of history. Sad that the bride is only 14. I enjoyed the mention of the flutes. I could see and hear this! Mine is at http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 11:06 PM
Awwww, Beth--You're always sweet and kind with your words. Thanks so much--I loved yours. Would've had to wreak some karma if it hadn't been fiction. :-)


Mike on Sunday, February 19, 2012 7:57 AM
A lovely, descriptive, almost melodic piece of writing. Phrases like, "...sleeping to the lullaby of waters tumbling over the rocks." conjured up all sorts of images in my head.
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 11:08 PM
Mike, I'm glad you enjoyed my story--thanks for taking the time to visit and comment. I appreciate it.


Russell on Sunday, February 19, 2012 8:33 AM
I especially love the last line, "ordinary days filled with extraordinary deeds" What a powerful closing.
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 11:09 PM
Russell, Thank you kindly for your visit and comments. They were appreciated.


Madison Woods on Sunday, February 19, 2012 9:31 AM
I loved this and enjoyed how easily you placed the reader in a different time and place. I'm late with my reading, too. We had a lot this time,and growing every week!
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 11:15 PM
Madison, Thank you for visiting and commenting. I know these submissions keep you busy--on top of everything else you do--but I'm soooo thrilled that you started this. I love reading all the posts and I love doing the exercise. It was a great idea on your part.


Andy Flood on Sunday, February 19, 2012 5:21 PM
This is beautifully well written; such a finely crafted piece which so evocatively communicates a deep and moving story. Excellent work :-) Makes me want to learn more, which is always good.
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V. L. Gregory on Sunday, February 19, 2012 11:17 PM
Andy, I appreciated your kind words. Thanks for taking the time to visit and comment.

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